First edit is done!
Time to go back and do it again. Many of the characters need refinement - their own verbiage and behaviors that distinguish them from one another.
As a parting gift, the end of a story within the story:
“Adam had never seen a town. It was terrifying and compelling. After eating several pieces of fruit and pacing back and forth, he decided to go into the town. At the bottom of the hill there was a small creek. Picking up speed, he easily bounded over the flowing water. As he landed, something caught his eye. There, at his feet - not 500 feet from the edge of human civilization, was the purple flower.”
“He bent over and as he moved to pluck the plant he heard the sweetest voice singing an unfamiliar tune. Looking over, he saw a beautiful woman piling up wood next to a small house. With a grin, he stood up and walked over her, leaving the flower forever.”
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